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At the Tone by ~gartoss:icongartoss:





I picked up the phone
and punched in your number
it felt like you were dying
I left you a voice mail
and in that song
I swear I wasn’t crying
can’t you tell
just by hearing?
don’t you know I’m smiling?
well either way
it doesn’t matter
‘cuz you never heard it ring

please insert a quarter
to keep tearing me apart
at the tone please hear
the breaking of my heart
leave your name and number
and I’ll get right back to you
at the tone leave your passion
I swear I felt it too

I swear that when I called you
those weren’t tears you heard
I mean they’re tears of joy
and when I first got word
I told you I was happy
that you’ve found a guy like him
and I promise if I had the chance
I gladly lie again

please insert a quarter
to keep tearing me apart
at the tone please hear
the breaking of my heart
leave your name and number
and I’ll get right back to you
at the tone leave your passion
I swear I felt it too

I feel like giving up
but I’m not afraid to try
though tears might be the answer
I won’t let you hear me cry

please insert a quarter
to keep tearing me apart
at the tone please hear
the breaking of my heart
leave your name and number
and I’ll get right back to you
at the tone leave your passion
I swear I felt it too

please insert a quarter
to keep tearing me apart
at the tone please hear
the breaking of my heart
leave your name and number
and I’ll get right back to you
at the tone leave your passion
I swear I felt it too

I swear I felt it too
I swear I felt it too
I swear I felt it too
I swear I felt it…
I swear…
I feel it too
©2007-2008 ~gartoss
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I just got a letter in and this seemed the only thing to say. Sorry it's so scattered-looking and unprofessional. I'll miss you dearly, Aijou.

--

What if I never saw you again?
I'd die right next to you in the end.

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~AngolSakura515:iconAngolSakura515: Aug 27, 2007, 7:54:31 PM
That's...so full of emotion. It is beautiful.

Scattered and un-professional looking? I think not.

Well done.
~gartoss:icongartoss: Aug 27, 2007, 7:57:35 PM
Thanks. Unlike the usual, I pretty much wrote anything that came out then worried about rhyme and reason. After all, it's just my thoughts on the situation, and since I couldn't actually get her voice mail, she'll see it here eventually.

--
"Love can never be portrayed the same way as a tree,
or the sea, or any other mystery.
It's the eyes with which we see.
It's the sinner and the saint.
It's the light inside the paint."

--Tom Tom, Million Dollar Hotel
~AngolSakura515:iconAngolSakura515: Aug 27, 2007, 8:02:55 PM
I like it though--it has much better flow and a better rhyme and reason, for not thinking about it. You should not think about writing more often. Big brother--if you still are my big bro--this was great!

She'll see it here? Is that good or bad?
~gartoss:icongartoss: Aug 27, 2007, 8:26:40 PM
I still am. And it's good that she'll see it here. If she doesn't, maybe she'll see somewhere else I posted it.

--
"Love can never be portrayed the same way as a tree,
or the sea, or any other mystery.
It's the eyes with which we see.
It's the sinner and the saint.
It's the light inside the paint."

--Tom Tom, Million Dollar Hotel
~Astor-Sigma:iconAstor-Sigma: Aug 28, 2007, 12:05:40 AM
Very nice. Reminds me of that country song...heh.

--
"I don't understand, but it's not a problem."
--Sousuke Sagura
~AngolSakura515:iconAngolSakura515: Aug 28, 2007, 6:16:14 AM
You still are. Makes me happy. Ah, okay. Well then, I hope she sees it. It's a great poem anyway.
~luv-u-2-death:iconluv-u-2-death: Aug 28, 2007, 9:03:47 AM
T_T It's gorgeous Bronson. Even if it is scattered it's awe inspiring.

--
American Evil
Hellister
Abercrombie & Fag

You catch my meaning?

*emo, punk, goth, grunge, scene, etc. ALL THE WAY*
~gartoss:icongartoss: Aug 28, 2007, 9:30:36 AM
Oh, shit, you mean Austin? I didn't even think of that! XD It made me think of Cake - Never There. XD

--
"Love can never be portrayed the same way as a tree,
or the sea, or any other mystery.
It's the eyes with which we see.
It's the sinner and the saint.
It's the light inside the paint."

--Tom Tom, Million Dollar Hotel
~gartoss:icongartoss: Aug 28, 2007, 9:31:16 AM
Thank you! And thanks for the Favourite!

--
"Love can never be portrayed the same way as a tree,
or the sea, or any other mystery.
It's the eyes with which we see.
It's the sinner and the saint.
It's the light inside the paint."

--Tom Tom, Million Dollar Hotel